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UnComfortably Numb by ~dwine:icondwine:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Spoken Word


I've been running scared of myself..
I've taken refuge in dreams..
My words have been drowning in tears..
My loneliness been comforted by fears..

I often wake up with a smile on my face..
It Lasts for a while before I realize she is not in her place..
I wish I could have saved some time
I pray I could re-live those moments

Its not fair, its sad but true,
i hate to admit, but i cant move on without you.
I talk to myself and then I talk to you,
and that makes everything okay, just like you used to do.

A part of me is still talking to you,
Its a growing disease I cant put throgh.
I think I've never been more in love with you.
Forgive me if I have to kill me to get over you.
©2007-2009 ~dwine
:icondwine:

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~littlefairygirl128 Jan 1, 2008, 10:37:30 AM
This is sad and moving. It's got desperation in it a bit. Well written.
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~ghbatt Jan 2, 2008, 8:10:09 AM
Great piece; you did a great job of setting the mood throughout this piece. I felt uncomfortable reading it, which really helped sell the idea you started in the title.

Bravo!
-gh
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~depprocker182 Jan 2, 2008, 1:21:21 PM
wow... it's amazing!

--
Too many think I'm a concept. I complete them or I'm gonna make them feel alive, but I'm just a girl looking for my own piece of mind. Don't assign me yours -E.S.

the 70s were overrated.
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~lovemeethate Jan 5, 2008, 4:13:34 PM
It does admit quite hopeless feelings that most keep locked up. I like it. I think it's powerful.

--

The illusion is that you are simply reading this poem.
The reality is that this is more than a poem. -Bukowski
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~dwine Jan 5, 2008, 4:16:36 PM
thanks a lot, it really means a lot to me.
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~wolfiesan Jan 7, 2008, 10:25:11 AM
I like all your work^^ it reminds me of feelings that I have had in the past... okay. feelings that I still have sometimes. I think that is why I like it...

--
it does not matter what you are,only what you want to be.
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~Pythongurl Jan 13, 2008, 10:20:06 AM
Wow. I have had this feeling before. Its amazing how you put it into words.

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I didn't give up on love, love gave up on me

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~dwine Jan 13, 2008, 11:57:22 AM
thanks =) means a lot to me, thats what poetry and DA is all about. Finding expressions of art which you feel but never could put into words, i'm glad I could make you feel that way
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~inspirational-dreams Jan 17, 2008, 6:46:42 PM
a feeling we all experience at one point in our lives... a feeling that absolutely sucks.

"Its a growing disease I cant put throgh" (small typ-0, 'throgh' should be through) 2nd line last stanza Forgive me if I have to kill me to get over you. <-- I think it'd sound a bit cleaner/less choppier if you said 'forgive me if i have to kill myself to get over you' just my opinion though

Great work though :highfive:

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"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who
mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
- Dr. Seuss

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